Let's Backtrack and Rewind

Sooo...evidently I'm supposed to have talked about my process of creating my monologue...
I had first decided the piece to be around only 2:15-2:3 minutes long, but that meant I had to cut it out using a music editor, which I had absolutely no idea how to use or get one. But as I began practicing, I realized it didn't need to be shortened; it was fine the way it was...as long as I added some stuff.

This is my 1st plot, before I gained my revelation of a new plot (the time after it is the TOTAL RUN TIME at the end of that phase; so at 0:35, it is a total of 35 seconds done at the end of that part):
Phone call about losing job (0:11)
walking around, not knowing what happens (0:35)
get out beer, drinks, looks at pockets, get out a knife (0:53)
Slits man's throat (1:01)
Policeman finds me, I try and fight through, they lock me up and take me to jail (1:23)
I eat, chains are taken off, pace around room (1:47)
Punches wall at CHORUS (2:02)
Door opens, tries to get out; fails and collapses on ground, defeated (2:11 or so)
END

Now this is my 2nd plot:
Phone call about losing job, tells them I have 3 pages left, they don't care. I slam the phone down (0:25)
Is pissed, not knowing what to do; gets out beer to drink, then looks in my pockets, finds out I have no money, and gets out to rob a place (1:00)
Goes to rob place, is caught and tries to fight my way out, caught and brought to jail (2:00)
At jail, chains are taken off, discovers this and runs to jaildoor just as they close it, shouting; then sits down and doesn't know what to do (2:35)
Pulls out my book and continues to write last 3 pages; finishes up just as jailman comes in and takes me away (3:00)
Leads me to judge; I talk to judge and jury: tell them I'm a changed man, pull out my book to show them and they kill me because they thinks its a concealed weapon (3:36)
I drop to the ground, holding out my bloodstained book, flipping through the pages (4:00 or so)
END
So yeah, that was my process. The second plot came right after I began practicing around Tuesday, November 11th, and the first plot came in the beginning of our monologue project.
I chose this song because I felt it was a nice song to show how a changed man in jail would "Someday" be freed (the song's name: Someday by Flipsyde).

Monologue!

Well the past performances have been swell; some I enjoyed, others turned out horrible. Anyways the past few days I've been practicing my monologue, and by the time of the perfomance I think i did well. However, I think I rushed it a bit, so that a few parts were off (example:drinking champagne [get beer] and no pain no gain [when I get hit]. And my death occured too quick, so that I waited on the ground dead for some time. I felt that all my movements were really crisp and big. I agree with the feedback I received from the audience: I started drinking too soon, which portrayed the image that I was fired for that sole purpose. Also, a few parts I felt I was turned away from the audience or profile so that my face couldn't be seen by the entire audience (example: when i was writing, when I was led away to jail).

Contrary to the negatives, I also feel that my performance stood out more than others by being more fast-paced and driven. I also kept a steady expression the whole time, which is hard for me, for my face drops into a smile subconsciously. I had also begun practicing my performance with a whole different idea: that I would end my days in jail after killing someone, instead of stealing from somewhere and getting killed in the courtroom. That's the second part I felt I did well on: IMPROVIZATION after I already had an idea. I think that this term is very important for my success in drama. Not only should I come up with a plot, but I should add and delete parts whenever necessary to create a better performance. The past performances helped me make my decision that I had to end better than just living it out in jail. The sad performances all ended somehow, but in a way it never came to a CLIMAX. I also felt that killing someone just wouldn't feel that...let's put it this way: it might've been more comical. Of course, to receive a trial, I needed a crime, so I chose a robbery. My climax would be a misunderstanding, which would lead to my death (as I try and pull out my story...people think it's a hidden weapon...I get shot...).

Yeap, that's my feedback for myself. Notice how I left the positive for the end? =)

On the end is my lyrics for the song Someday, by Flypside (post a comment somewhere or talk to me in class if you want the song)

[Chorus] Someday we gonna rise up on that wind you knowSomeday we gonna dance with those Lyiers

Someday we gonna break free from thesechains and keep on flyin'[Verse 1]

They tellin' me it's all good just wait

You know you're gonna be there someday

Sippin' on Jim Beam ok

Gotta get these things one day

Till then do another line you know

Searching for that other high

Stop or I gotta steal then steal

Kill or I'm gonna be killed

I got a sack in my pocketConscious yellin' drop it

You know we're gonna lose it someday

And we tryin' to hold it all togetherbut the devil is too clever so

I'm gonna die you gonna die we gonnadie Someday one day I said[Chorus]

Someday we gonna rise up on the wind you knowSomeday we gonna dance with those lyiers

Someday we gonna break free from thesechains and keep on flyin'[Verse 2]

Try to lie but it ain't me Ain't me

Try to look but I can't see

Can't stop right now cause I'm toofar and I can't keep goin' causeit's too hardIn the day in the night it's the same thing

On the field on the block it's the same game

On the real if you stop then it's nopain but if you can't feel pain thenit's no gain

Rearrange and you change and it'sall bad and you try to maintain butyou fall back

And you crawl and you slip and you slide down

Wanna make it to the top better start now

So I hold my soul and I die hard

All alone in the night in the graveyard

Someday one day I'm gonna be free and theywon't try to kill me for being me

Hey someday[Chorus] Someday we gonna rise up on that wind you knowSomeday we gonna dance with those lyiersSomeday we gonna break free from thesechains and keep on flyin'If you know how this isGonna see it's not that easyDon't stop get it till it's doneFrom where you are or have begunI said keep on try a little harder tosee everything you need to beBelieve in your dreamsThat you see when you're asleep[Chorus] Someday we gonna rise up on that wind you knowSomeday we gonna dance with those lyiersSomeday we gonna break free from thesechains and keep on flyin'

"Feature" Presentation

Wow, my last blog ended with feature...instead of future. So here has been my feature presentation for the last 2 weeks (it just keeps on slippin' my mind...)
So my first group performance was with three other girls. We did a ski performance thing where we raced down a hill and how the small one passes us in the end. Unforturnately, we never got to present it to the class. After that, me and Razvan did our pantamiming on boxing. I felt it was a success, except I smiled a few times. The contrast between me, the lame fighter, and Razvan, the big and burly one, went well. We got good feedback from the audience, since we incorporated a lot of moments of "glory"; when Razvan took me down, when I DK punched him (as Cheng called it), and when I went off basking in my pride.
So, after these performances, I watched a preview of the fall play, Night of the Living Dead. On Saturday, I went to watch the real thing with my Pre-Calc friends. It was well done. A few parts, I felt (critique time), were more funny than horrifying. One man is chased down by zombies from outside three times, and some word choices were funny as well. But I thought it was pretty good, except man! It was a lil too short. After all this, there comes a few days where we practice pantamiming, and get ready for our monologue. Oh boy. I'm doing mine on Someday, by Flipsyde. It's gonna be really serious, so I'll let my blog know when I'm done. I'll probably go on Wednesday. Until then, Peace.